What do you think about my YouTube video? Any suggestions?

Alright my friend and I started making YouTube videos. What do you think about this one. It is very difficult. Ok so it starts out by seeing a reflection of a zombie eating a hand in a mirror. My friend bursts in through the door and you see him smack the zombie in the head with a FAKE crowbar. Blood splatters on the mirror. The camera goes to me my friend and on this girl that is our friend. We raid the house for supplies. We run out run to our friends house. We find her in the house being attacked by her zombified family. We get her and run back to the house we raided to get a golfcart. My friend and a girl sit up front. The girl we rescued from the house sits in the back of the golfcart with me. The driver struggles to find the key in his pocket. A crawling zombie in the garage grabs the girl in the back’s leg and drags her back into the garage and eats her. The golfcart starts up and we drive out into the neighborhood and down the street while like 10 zombies cause aver us. A zombie grabs me and I fall out of the golfcart. I reach out for their hand but miss. They drive away but soon run out of gas. They run in the fields while like 20 zombies are running after them. They are more like infected. The girl runs and then trips. She crawls away, but the zombies catch up to her and then eat her. The guy tries to save her and shoots at the zombies with a pretend gun, (airsoft gun) but then runs out of bullets and then climbs on top of the golfcart and then I am a zombie and then I climb on top of the golfcart and then drag him down into the swarm. The end. Tell me what you think.